Convergent Boundary Peer Feedback

1/3/2012

7 Comments

 
Hello! Today I would like you to review my Convergent Boundary page. For this page I would like you to focus on my information. Please no negative comments, positive are much appreciated. Thank you!
-Ammit the Devourer
7 Comments
Cat "N" the hat
1/3/2012 05:33:10 am

Grammer : your grammer is very good except for one of the I's are not capitalized

Information: I did not find any problems with your info it is very good

Spelling: your spelling is very good no errors

Capitals: every thing is capialized

Puncuation : all is good

Media: all the media is on topic

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Ammit the Devourer
1/3/2012 12:02:43 pm

I could not find the problem. Please specify where it is. Thank you!
-Ammit the Devourer

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sandy squirrel
1/3/2012 05:34:56 am

GRAMMAR: You had said “a Oceanic”, when I think you mean “a”. It was great all in all! Other than that tiny mistake I think you have put really good grammar!

INFORMATION: The information is fantastic, however I know that this information has not been put into your own words. I have seen it in the B.C Science 7 textbook, and I really think you should put it into you own words! Other than that your information looks great!

SPELLING: I have noticed a teeny mistake in your, “Continental-Continental Convergence” section, in the last sentence you have put “seduction”, when I think you mean subduction. Other than that it looks great!

Capitals: For some of the words you have put a whole word in capitals whereas in some you do not! Other than that its great!

Puncuation: You have great punctuation I havnt noticed any errors!

Media: the pictures look great and I love how you put a separate one for each!

Great Job!!!! :D

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Ammit the Devourer
1/3/2012 12:09:00 pm

I did see an error with the grammar, but not in the way you perceived it. I did remove, "a" but replaced it with,"an" since the word after begins with a vowel. Also, I have put everything into my own words. Thank you very much for the feedback, I will be sure to correct my errors as soon as possible.Thanks!
-Ammit the Devourer

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Conan
1/3/2012 09:06:21 am

Grammar: Like Sandy Squirrel, you don't need to put 'a' in front of 'Oceanic'.

Information: Try to put information into your own words. Also, put 'Convergence' right beside to Oceanic-Continental,Oceanic-Oceanic and Continental-Continental.

Spelling: There are few Spelling errors. For Oceanic-Continental and Continental-Continental sections, you spelled 'volcanos' wrong. It's suppose to be 'volcanos".

Capitals: You need to capitalize 'Mantle', 'Oceanic Plate' and 'Oceanic-Oceanic Convergence' which is in Oceanic-Oceanic Convergence section.

Punctuation: There are few punctuation errors.

Media: Great images and video!

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Greg Heffley
1/3/2012 09:09:27 am

Hi Ammit, I really like how you put a picture for each convergent boundary, and how they really represent it. And all your information looks to be very reliable, because most of it has .edu at the end or the BC Nelson Probe 7 book. You had plenty of information! And everything seems to be in your own words! And I like the video also, it shows what happens and the reason why convergent boundaries happen! From: Greg Heffley

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Pooh Bear
1/3/2012 01:08:48 pm

Grammar-
I didn't find any grammar mistakes. So that was awesome!

Information-
I thought you could add a little bit more information and been more descriptive. And some sentences you didn't put in your own words, so remember to change that.

Spelling-
I honestly didn't find any spelling errors, which is really awesome to know!

Punctuation-
Your punctuation was great with not many mistakes!

Media-
You had good and clear pictures, but one image I couldn't see and it was not very clear, so I suggest changing that image. I found your video was on topic to so that was a good choice.

Overall I can really see that you worked very hard on this section and you edited so GREAT work! :)

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