The Structure of the Earth Peer Assesment

12/14/2011

4 Comments

 
Hello! Please post positive comments about my 'The Structure of the Earth' pages. I would like you to look for my spelling and/or grammar errors. Thank you!
- Ammit the Devourer
4 Comments
Conan
12/14/2011 09:39:36 am

Crust
- You don't need to put "The Plates of the Lithosphere" right beside to the "crust" section.;)

Mantle
- Put a imformation like what is the temperature of the Upper Mantle and the Lower Mantle.

Outer Core
- Change the picture of the outer core.
It's too blurry and it doesn't show the outer core specificly.

Inner Core
- You can change the word 'presume' to 'assume' or 'think'.
-Put more details

Anyway, you did a great job!

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Mr. Hong
12/14/2011 12:14:14 pm

@ Ammit - Please remove the twitter and facebook icons. To do this, simply go into the 'MANAGE BLOG' section and adjust the settings. Simply uncheck the box where the twitter/facebook information is located.

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sandy squirrel link
12/14/2011 12:16:40 pm

Hi Ammit! Today I have reviewed your website today for the Structure of the Earth sections.

For the Structure of the Earth intro page:
-Nothing really wrong with your intro page, it is actually excellent! I love how you placed the 4 layers in such bold words!:D

For the Earth's Crust page:
-I suggest that you make the picture bigger so we can read the labels on it, if that is not possible you might want to get a different yet relevant picture.
-Capitalize Continental and Oceanic Crust.
-you should also capitalize Crust.
-YOU SHOULD CHANGE THE SENTENCE TO "Forms rock*".
-You have wrote Intrusive rock forms inside or outside the Earth. It cannot be inside and out I think you were rushing but its a mini mistake.
-I have found lots of information on this page that has been summarized into great words. Keep it up! :D

For the Mantle page:
-You do not need to capitalize "THE", all you need is Mantle.
-You should say "and it is called", instead of, "is called".
-capitalize Mantle.
-Great metaphor you had used to explain how the Mantle moves! :D

For the Inner Core page:
-The title is red and very eye catching..a little too eye catching that now it is very distracting. I suggest you change that.
-You do not need to capitalize SOLID*.
-"Made up of mainly of", I think you need to check your grammar.
-I enjoyed how you summarized it! :P

For the Outer Core page:
-I think, that you might want to make the font a teensy, tiny bit bigger.
-I suggest you put it into your own words, other than that its great.

I found your website very informational and I have also learned about things I might need to add to my website. It was a pleasure giving you feedback on your website. :P

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Greg Heffley
12/14/2011 01:08:57 pm

Hi Ammit, I really like your crust page and the information but you may want to put the rock cycle video away. I really like your mantle section too, and how you put the main words into a different font but you may want to add a video. I like all your outer core information too but you may want to add a video. And I like the picture for the inner core and the information!

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